Raijin Clan Kumogakure

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Raijin

CLAN TYPE: Kekkei Genkai VILLAGE: Kumogakure ORIGIN: Kaminari No Kuni CLAN HISTORY: Raijin clan had been in Kaminari No Kuni for as long as one could remember. They were famous shinobi, known for their deadliness in combat. Kaminari had been their home since their founding, although, they had not always been the Raijin clan. Originally they were the Komaru clan, although noone knows this, and used raiton and suiton, but never their kekkei genkai. Noone had thought of doing such a thing. That was until Raiden Komaru, the clan leader. One day he got the brilliant idea: why not combine them. When he did, he was the first to ever create Ranton, and taught it to his entire clan. A few years later, Raiden Komaru adopted a child, and tried to teach him Ranton, but found that he couldn't use it. Infact, only this clan members could do such a thing, and even then not all of them. It was then that Kekkei Genkai were discovered, revolutionizing shinobi ninjutsu. Eventually Raiden Komaru would discover two more of his clan's abilities when his son was killed in battle. In a moment of rage, a storm formed over head, with lightning crackling and scattering among the clouds. Raiden stretched out his hand and sent a lightning bolt strait into the enemy clan's leader. Killing him the enemy clan scattered, despite being hunted by Raiden himself. Those who made it away began to spread the word of the clan, referring to them as the Raijin clan, meaning lightning god clan. The Komaru took on this name with pride, wearing it like a badge of honor. However, at an unknown point, they started to spread their numbers thin, do to constantly marrying outside of the clan. As such the Raijin clan slowly faded into obscurity. The only remains of the clan existed Kaminari No Kuni. The blood of the Raijin clan flows in the veins of nearly every shinobi in Kaminari no Kuni, although their abilities only show up in a few. Despite the fact that the clan itself has integrated into Kaminari no Kuni, there was a large gathering of those with the Raijin clan's abilities at another point in the history of Kaminari no Kuni. During the war between the Udemikoshi and the Yokoshima, all who possessed the Raijin's abilities, be it by coincidence or not, sided with Raiden Udemikoshi. Each person's story for why they had joined varied, but all of them had the same end result, the leader of the Yokoshima Kurahama had placed some family member into Koiyama. Raiden Udemikoshi decided to place those who had the Raijin abilities in special squad, devoted to taking down stronger armies. Of course they were devastating in battle, winning countless battles for the Udemikoshi. However, during their final battle, Kurahama fought with a disgusting and repulsive tactic. He took their relatives out of Koiyama, and forced them to fight those they had raised. Any one on Kurahama's side who didn't fight a relative died, and anyone who possessed the Raiden clan's abilities that killed a relative were so heart broken that they were an easy kill. This battle would be remembered as "the day of storms", do to so many Raijin were depressed and enraged that the storms created spread out and caused tempest for several villages within Kaminari no Kuni. While that generation of Raijin met their end, another group appeared. While still not the clan, they all still possessed the abilities of Raijin. They were the ones who helped during the Gokage War. While many others helped the Udemikoshi or the Yokoshima, they went to fight against the ever increasing attacks of Ten Tails Clones. During this time many of these men and women would die, but they would soon be replaced by some other person who came forward with Raijin abilities. This cycle would repeat until the end of the war, with many nameless men and women with this kekkei genkai dying. There were also a few famous people with the Raijin Clan's abilities who have appeared through history, although their histories always tended to be short. Yashido Raijin Known as "Yashido of the Flash", Yashido was among the strongest Raijin on his time, back when there was a tradition of taking up the Raijin name when one manifested the kekkai genkai. He existed roughly when the formation wars first began. He was not only deadly, but one of the few people who could survive: Tensō no Jutsu, and use it on himself. Unfortunately, shortly after becoming one of the strongest shinobi at the time, Yashido was killed in combat. Kei Sotaru Known as "Stormcrown Kei", Kei was a strong shinobi during the formation wars. His command of the kekkai genkai was rivaled by few, as he knew nearly every single jutsu that was linked to the kekkai genkai. He was also known for his ability to summon Storms at will to decimate his opponents. Unfortunately he would die at the age of thirty five in combat. Ichini Sanyon Known as "Blinding Beauty", Ichini was a strong shinobi who manifested the Raijin ability to use Ranton. She was known for having particularly bright beams, blinding many enemy she fought. She was also well known for having exquisite accuracy when it came to her beams. She had one of the highest kill counts of the Raijin until Nana Chikara, and still has one far above most Raijin today. Unfortunately, she would loose her life to Juubei. Rakurai Uzumaki Known simply as "The Demon Breaker" Rakurai was a powerful Raijin, taking down multiple Juubei clones. However, the thing he is most famous for is manifesting two clan abilities at once. He is the only recorded Raijin to manifest two clan's powers, his being the abilities of the Uzumaki and the Raijin. He was known to be able to use Storm Release Chakra Chains,  a unique chakra chain that could be formed into any shape with suiton and slash, impale, and electrocute with raiton. Unfortunately his life was lost on the last day of the Gokage War. Nana Chikara Known as "Thunder Clap Nana", Nana was a powerful Raijin, and a fairly recent one.  Nana was the first and so only Raijin to surpass the kill count of Ichini Sanyon. She was also known for turning electricity into physical power, allowing her to do things even the strongest shinobi could not. The most famous account of this was during a battle with a group of rouge shinobi. when Nana's squad was killed before her, a storm formed over head. As lightning arced around her, she stuck a hand into the air and pulled a lightning bolt into herself. Afterwards she jumped high into the air and slammed her foot into the ground, shattering the earth beneath her as well as killing the rouge shinobi through sheer force. Unfortunately, Nana was killed on her next mission. CLAN PERSONALITY: The Raijin clan, having died long ago, left no ideology behind. However, a small part of their old personality seems to seep through into any who has their gene dominant. Anyone to show the ability to use Ranton has manifested certain traits depending on which element they leaned more towards, although some manifest traits of both elements. Raiton Traits; living in the moment, easily bored, head on thinker, confident (some times overly so), charismatic, not good with authority. Suiton Traits; laid back, strong willed, hard to read, flexible, moody, prone to grudges and negativity. There also used to be a tradition that if one manifested the abilities of the clan they would take on the name Raijin, but that is rarely practiced anymore. CLAN ABILITIES: Rare While the blood of the Raijin flows through many many people of the Kaminari no Kuni, the trait is recessive trait. As such, its more likely that one person every generation will have the Kekkei Genkai. Do to this they also tend to have recessive genes for looks, such as attached earlobes, blonde hair, or blue/green eyes. Ranton [Storm Release] The unique kekkei genkai of the Raijin clan. This kekkei genkai is fierce, as it combined the deadly power of Raiton with the control of Suiton. All jutsu from this kekkai genkai form beams. The beams are created through raiton (supplying the plasma and power) and Suiton (supplying the control). True Lightning Manipulation An ability of the Raijin clan, and the ability that earned them the name in the first place. The Raijin have the unique ability to utilize lightning from storms. When doing so this allows them to strengthen their lightning based attacks, making them twice as deadly. CLAN HIERARCHY: The Raijin clan had integrated itself into Kaminari no Kuni a long time ago, and holds no hierarchy. However originally they were a: the wisest among us leads, clan. As such the clan leader was always the eldest member of the clan. When they died, or their mental health deteriorated, the next oldest Raijin takes his place. MEMBERS: Jonin Clan Member:  Chuunin Clan Member:    Genin Clan Member of age 13-15:   Genin Clan Member of Age 10-12: Michio Sotaru

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is this done if so there is a lot that needs to be edited

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History
- I still need way more for the history to accept this. What you have is a good start, but I need more details. They didn't just come into being, so how did they all come together? Why?
- Also, I'm not really keen on almost every citizen of Kaminari having the clans blood in their veins. If they're a small clan, this would make no sense.

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"Bel, I still need way more for the history to accept this. What you have is a good start, but I need more details. They didn't just come into being, so how did they all come together? Why?" Expanded

"Also, I'm not really keen on almost every citizen of Kaminari having the clans blood in their veins. If they're a small clan, this would make no sense."

It's not that the clan was small, its that the clan married out of the family so much that they died out. Its kinda like Kenghis Kahn and the Chinese. Even over a thousand years later, there is still a bit of his blood in many people of Chinese Nationality.

In this case, think of it like Magnet Release in Cannon Naruto. Multiple people from different villages had it, with no blood relation. Heck even the Fourth Kazekage, a man who was extremely powerful with magnet release even making his own style, had three kids who didn't (on their own) have magnet release, one of them only getting it through Shukaku. Heck even when his kids had kids, only ONE had the Kekkei Genkai trait dominant within him.

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don't want to step on any toes but remove those pictures they are not needed there

also there are KKG that are considered to be rare among the clans that they are found in but that does not mean that the bloodline is thinned out for example the Kaguya clan which states that the KKG is so rare that other members of the clan fear those who are born with it also the Sharingan which is stated to only appear in select few Uchiha...also I do not see how Magnet release in cannon naruto ties into you saying the clan is small but every member of kaminari no kuni has the clans blood within them...Also Gaara inherited his Magnet release from Rasa he just never had to use it until Shukaku was removed, I say all that to say this just because a KKG is harder to pass down then some does not mean the clan was dying off. Also you compared the bloodline of one man to the bloodline of an entire clan so either the entire clan began marrying others which would expand the clan (as the other choice of marrying inside the clan would be incest) or the clan started dying off by not having children it would be impossible to say that they were expanding their blood relatives and growing smaller.

I do not know if I like their ability of weather manipulation without a jutsu

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"don't want to step on any toes but remove those pictures they are not needed there

also there are KKG that are considered to be rare among the clans that they are found in but that does not mean that the bloodline is thinned out for example the Kaguya clan which states that the KKG is so rare that other members of the clan fear those who are born with it also the Sharingan which is stated to only appear in select few Uchiha...also I do not see how Magnet release in cannon naruto ties into you saying the clan is small but every member of kaminari no kuni has the clans blood within them...Also Gaara inherited his Magnet release from Rasa he just never had to use it until Shukaku was removed, I say all that to say this just because a KKG is harder to pass down then some does not mean the clan was dying off. Also you compared the bloodline of one man to the bloodline of an entire clan so either the entire clan began marrying others which would expand the clan (as the other choice of marrying inside the clan would be incest) or the clan started dying off by not having children it would be impossible to say that they were expanding their blood relatives and growing smaller." Done

"I do not know if I like their ability of weather manipulation without a jutsu"
My idea was that it would work like the two parts of the eye for sharingan.

For example a genin would have D in one and E in the other two, while a jonin would have B in one and C in another, then D in the last.

and as far as what the ranks would do

Storm Chakra and E would be unusable except for a small cloud forming over their head, some times only a few feet from them. D would cover about that of one cloud, C would be a small collection of them, B would be full tropical storms, and A would be hurricanes.

Meanwhile True Lightning Manipulation's ranks would basically be: whatever rank you have in this is the kind of jutsu you can use real lightning on. Ex: D-ranks would only empower D-rank moves, while B would be able to cover B, and the same for A.

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my issue with the weather manipulation is that you could decimate an entire village just by getting angry because you do not need a jutsu to manipulate weather which makes no sense to the clan and their abilities and sort of comes from nowhere. As its sort of a personal issue that I have against it if another staff member is ok with it then I will let it go by as it I am reluctant to accept an ability like that.

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after some advice, I was a bit more specific on the levels of what one can achieve, as well as nerfed it.

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I will remove myself from this app as the whole weather manipulation thing still strikes me as not a fit for this clan no matter how you nerf it it does not stop my feeling that it comes from nowhere and does not fit the clan as I said this may just be a personal thing so i will remove myself from further grading this and let someone else take a swing at it

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Storm Chakra
- While I agree with Red that the weather manipulation and laser/beam stuff seems a bit unrelated, I'm willing to give my OK on the condition that a Raijin can have either a) weather manipulation OR b) laser creation. But not both.
- As an aside, if you can try and relate the weather manipulation a bit more into their overall abilities (i.e. why/how their chakra manifests as storms or lasers), it would be appreciated.

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storm charka removed, kekkei genkai explained

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As long as you understand you will need to app separate jutsu for the lightning usage (this will not be an innate ability on its own), I'll give my ¹/₂

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I am still iffy on the KKG being able to do two things (also you should be aware of the difference of do and due)

Also you stated that only one in every generation would be able to use the KKG if this is true there should be a member slot for the one person that could use it.

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"I am still iffy on the KKG being able to do two things (also you should be aware of the difference of do and due)" oops forgot to edit ^^' edits made

"Also you stated that only one in every generation would be able to use the KKG if this is true there should be a member slot for the one person that could use it." actually its already there.

Jonin Clan Member: likely the oldest generation
Chuunin Clan Member: another generation
Genin Clan Member of age 13-15: the generation before him
Genin Clan Member of Age 10-12: latest generation (unless and academy student is made)

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a generation is roughly one per 25 years however we are not going to get into that 

What i am saying is that the way you have it now everyone in the clan will have the KKG which is not one person per generation so you need member slots for people without the KKG as well as the slots for those with the KKG (one of each rank work even though that is not truly generational I see what you were going for and honestly the best way to describe it I could think of is generational).